The dark forest

Before

Come to my silent forest, you’ll love the peace and cool colors.

After

Come to my forest you’ll love the peace and cool colors. You can feel the silence creeping up to you and the darkness covering your eyes, as fear fills your head like air flowing through you,then the cold breeze blows you away. 
The lifeless trees have branches as sharp as needles but as soon as you start to run you notice you're lost.
Edited by Patrick